More pics of you with othr people, particularly girls, family etc. Would change the photo order. First two photos you are making guarded blocking gestures, crossed arms and drink clutched over chest. Racing photos are cool and one on top of mountain after those two is good. Woman reads on...

'O, Engineer = good job' she thinks. Looking for long term relationship = pressure, if there's a 'looking for a relationship' option that would be better. "O, good he's got a car" she says.

reads first sentence of ur bio "Nah" brain switches off, next profile.

I agree with the guys above.

The first photo is shit, she might even think you're the fat bloke at the bottom of the frame and move on. More photos of you actually smiling, having a laugh, and around women, would help. From those uploaded so far I'd use the fish kissing one, the car thing may look cool to you and I but most girls don't give a shit about motor sport, they probably see overalls and think you're a grease monkey at the local Kwik Fit. Keep it in there but don't make a play of it.

Sapphire has nailed the written profile for you, it's all so Disney and weak (sorry mate, just trying to be honest). Needs complete re-writing with much more purpose, something funny, something challenging, some character...much less of the "please like me, and if you do I'l love you for ever and ever I promise" type tone, if you catch my drift.

Hope helps.

PS

i saw ur profile and it made me wanna write a quick draft of what i'd put in mine:


nights where you don't plan anything but just go out with the idea to shake life up... i like people who do that.
i like the gym, cooking, music and all that boring stuff too. seriously i like all those things, you like all those things, we should so make babies.
im studying to be a doctor so i can save peoples lives like batman and ultimately be like house and christian troy from nip/tuck.
authenticity is key in life, you have to be comfortable, let loose and see whats important. alcohol helps with this.
i love women, i adore women. i'm close to my mum and my sister. they've taught me to treat women with respect. i feel like i can be real and connect on every level (other than periods) when i talk to girls. yeah i love women.
what am i looking for? what are we all looking for? a girl whos good looking is awesome, but its the same as having a nice painting to look at. its really nice to look at and puts a smile on my face for a while but an awesome meaningful song gets right into my head and evokes so much more emotion for me.
if you didn't get that, look at the next profile cos you're way too hot, cool and amazing.

xxx
p.s. please love me and yes i am that hot and going to be a doctor



id probably get zero responses but id feel really cool inside. the p.s. is me trying to be a douche for sure btw yo.

sapphire nailed it.

love the way he totally deconstruced it, in piss-take way coupled with advice. GG
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Also think up a way to get much better quality - lighting, focus, etc - photo of u (and no random guy next to u and no arm crossing from u) to get on your primary profile pic

Would be interested to hear examples of profiles of people who get fit girls from POF.

I briefly tried this about a year ago and not one of the girls that seemed interested floated my boat. Seemed like a waste of time.

This thread started by Breaker might help:
Online Dating Sites
Your profile is boring and doesn't stand out. Take on board the advice given. Although I do believe, you can even just write two lines on your profile and get a lot of women as long as your pictures stand out....! Good luck!

Couldn’t resist the chance to experiment, uploaded a profile Friday using PUA tactics, 23 emails when logged in tonight, seriously if anyone is considering this an option, do it.

Here’s an example.

Your profile's quite out there and so I thought I would say hello, I’m...

Just give them what they want fun and adventure. If I was still single, I’d be doing it. You still have to meet them, so I don’t see this as cop out. If you don’t go down the sad fucker AFC profile writing route you’re going to get results.

Sapphire’s post is very good and a great starting point for those struggling with a profile.

For obvious reaons I'm not going to around much, but if you need help you can always drop me a mail, I'm no expert, far from it, but I've done okay, always happy to pass on knowledge.

nights where you don't plan anything but just go out with the idea to shake life up... thats the best way to have fun.
i like the gym, cooking, music and all that boring stuff too. seriously i like all those things, you like all those things, we should so make babies.
im studying to be a doctor so i can save peoples lives like batman and ultimately be like house and christian troy from nip/tuck.
authenticity is key in life, you have to be comfortable, let loose and see whats important. alcohol helps with this.
i love women, i adore women. i'm close to my mum and my sister. they've taught me to treat women with respect. i feel like i can be real and connect on every level (other than periods) when i talk to girls. yeah i love women.
what am i looking for? what are we all looking for? a girl whos good looking is awesome, but its the same as having a nice painting to look at. its really nice to look at and puts a smile on my face for a while but an awesome meaningful song gets right into my head and is so much more interesting and intriguing.
if you didn't get that, look at the next profile cos you're way too hot, cool and amazing. if you did...

xxx


hows that guys? i rly wanna make a profile now so i can get girls whilst chilling at home, eating training and watching the wire.

To be fair I’d completely re-write but that’s just my view.

Don’ use ‘like’ it lacks passion, its an average AFC phrase.

Love cooking, enjoy the gym, can’t live without music etc.

most adult girls are not looking for comic book hero’s,I want to save peoples and make a difference, no reference to batman.

Remove the whole authenticity sentence, girls know authenticity is important don’t shove it down her throat the only thing going down her throat should be your cock. Saying alcohol helps with life is sending out the wrong message as well

Saying you love women is all well and dandy don’t you think she’s heard this before? Try and demonstrate this in another way.

I’ve always had a problem with ‘what am i looking for’, its nothing to do with you mate. Sure go down this route and show her you have standards but try and add in what she gets out of the deal.

I can’t put my finger on it but this is somehow weak ‘if you didn't get that, look at the next profile cos you're way too hot, cool and amazing. if you did’

lol it was all basically a sarcastic dig... i thought you'd get it. this has made me rethink people's intelligence on dating sites now.

i.e. the whole im sensitive to women then throwing in the period line
be authentic and then say drink alcohol to help you be genuine
seeing women as paintings = sexist
being a doctor =/= being batman and house/christian troy being two of the most sexist and disrespectful people to women
the last line was just mocking stupid people

could you show an example of what you think is a good intro? im really interested. i'm surprised anything but looks attracts girls on dating sites. if an introduction could really reel in lots of girls, it would really validate all this PUA bullshit to me.