Good initiative, every good salesman / pickup artist / speaker will always tell you that recording yourself is the only way to progress. Most pick up artist will do that on their bootcamp to show their students what they have done wrong. Use those record to improve instead of show off I would say. I didn't have time to watch it properly but if you don't need to improve that's brilliant and a good start for a youtube account
Try not to show faces, I guess that's what broadsword wanted to say.
In general don't get too shaken by the comment you will get on this forum, it's not really a pick up forum but more of a group of guy that like to talk to girls. Nothing to deal with the classic "Game" and shit.