Thanks for the tips guys!

Definately will take on the board the points about the text. Obviously it worked but there is always room for improvement. I think the main barrier I am trying to overcome is actiing as if you are "the prize" !! ( once again it comes down to state! )

With regards to Metagame. This is something I read about that Adam Lyons (AFC Adam) was developing a theory to apply to game.

I understand it to mean if you are in an environment where there are lots of PUA's you can utilize this to your advantage. E.g if a set has just been approached by a PUA you can then go in after them and construct an opener which utilizes the fact that the girls have been approached already e.g " So looks like you've got yourself a new boyfriend" ( loads of winks, girl signals e.t.c)

Havent really tried this out a whole lot so still learning!! :-)